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NEO 3D
15 / 04 / 2007, 04:05 PM
Hope you like this poetry that I wrote from 2 days ago please give me your thoughts and comments.

Leaves are falling
Leaving me behind the silence of fall
But I know that the forest won't leave me alone
Can't you just set free from the chains of agony
life is too short for us
It can't make us understand which path to take

All colors seems to fade away
My path for you are fading away
Losing my faith in everything I believed
I know I should run before the moon to catch you
But I always wonder why should I do this for you

Now the forest dressed white
And slay every sense I had
Cold and white never see any dark
sun always shines on my face but it's not the same
Since you in my dreams and thoughts
You never thought that I can fight and stand
But now the forest is with me

She dressed all green
And the fields just turn out to be a dreams
Never thought it will catch my soul
Like a butterfly with the rose
A rose of black to hold your thorn

I will not think of you again
I decide taht I'm here to stay
With all the singing birds and speaking trees
The enchantment of them take all my breath away
No more feelings in vain
No more never ending cries
So please forgive me for leaving all the memories
And for the shattered Pieces I left behind

Now is a new day without you
all my fears are gone
and I forget all that I left behind
I'm sorry if you can't see the truth
And it's so you see only what can't be true
Here is my world that I'll never let go
So no meaning left to close your eyes
Cause you'll stay behind

noby 3d
17 / 04 / 2007, 03:22 AM
very good man
realy good poem
with my best wishes

NEO 3D
17 / 04 / 2007, 01:52 PM
Thank you man
but can you tell me which the best line you like the most

noby 3d
22 / 04 / 2007, 02:50 AM
All colors seems to fade away
My path for you are fading away
Losing my faith in everything I believed
I know I should run before the moon to catch you
But I always wonder why should I do this for you

IT SEEMS VERY GOOD TO ME

لووول
24 / 04 / 2007, 11:41 AM
Losing my faith in everything I believed

never let go ya neo 3d

& nice words

thank you and god bless u

NEO 3D
25 / 04 / 2007, 05:11 PM
Thankx Pro hope you the best